Monday, November 10, 2008

She's So Cold

Pen A Trait

The wind chimer froze
as iciclets erection
from the underneathith.
Cocked center clomper,
string-locked quite crick-ed,
so no songs till spring thaw
when some dripping beats
unsleep; a contrite trickle
will drumskin like rain
as musicality swirls
swallowing the wind.


FishHawk said...

Perhaps it is just my degenerate nature rearing it's sophomoric head, but that sounds somewhat erotic to me. Is it meant to?

Bernard Alain said...

I like this bobby, particulary the word art, a testy little ink blot with lots for the reader to ponder

tanuj solanki said...

sexual imagination leading to extraordinary word play!

the word erection... I am sure it is not only sexual... but I would be surprised if you were thinking anything else... because that is the first picture it gives to the reader as a word...

and a poet can ask the readers to adopt only a lil...

i loved it!

TheJoeReview said...

I have to agree this does sound a bit erotic, but great poem. Hope you don't mind my comment, I ran across your blog while looking for poetry blog. Great page you got here though, have been enjoying your posts. Will be back to view more.
I write a bit myself, although it's been a while since I have written some poems. I have posted some of my older work up on my blog. Come by & check it out. Let me know what you think.

Jillian said...

It's got a lovely musicality of it's own :)Very visual.

Calder said...

Hey Jerry, thanks for the read... ya think... winks!!

Thanks to you Bernie, glad you enjoyed this little spill.

Hey Tanuj!! Always great to see you here friend. Appreciate the great comment.

I enjoyed my visit to your site Joe although I couldn't find a place to comment there. Write on friend!!

Hello Jillian, thanks a lot for the read and friendly comment. Keep smiling!!

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Anonymous said...

Don't stop posting such themes. I love to read stories like that. Just add some pics :)